the music is nice and the lyrics are pretty deep
Some of your singing sounds better at certain parts than other . It feels like you cutting notes too soon . Even if you don't have big range you can still do better because i can hear you pulling it off and than you cutting notes again
Go over the song worth someone who can be honest and patch it up and keep that in mind in the future
The lyrics are by Aviators; I just did the remix itself. His vocals were provided as-is from the original track as opposed to seperated any sort of way, so any deviation from that required some manner of cutting. You might want to check him out; he's come a fair ways in the vocal department recently, and the source on this is nearly a year old now. https://www.youtube.com/user/SoundOfTheAviators
Don't count on drums alone to carry the song . You need to have 3-4 lead melodies . I can only hear one
At the start you should have just had single analog . I find that random noisy effects rarely complement the song .
Start with single analog or analog and drums
after 20-60 seconds add second analog,synth and drums if you want
in the middle replace lead analog with another one
No matter what style of music you make you need progression and smoth transitions which this track lacks .
I know to carry melodies out but I kinda wanted drums to be just that, thanks for the tips though
I am gentleman . I still like butts though .
This will get us some butts right?
ya dawg bust this out at your next party and the females will be going crazy!!
sounds a lot like my personal music X) is progressive trance you favorite genre?
build up was maybe 20 seconds too long in my humble opinion .
Also i think the track lacks character . At 1:32 that breakdown probably could use another verse .
I tend to make similar mistake so thats something we both could improve on .
i normally don't do trance progressive, i usually stick to a more house style. i was pretty concerned about the build, because it did seem too long, but then when i shortened it, it just seemed to make things happen faster than i would like. i've still got a lot left to learn lol.
I can see this being inside Disney cartoon like Lion King XD
"Hakonna newgroudns , what a wonderful site" o eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
I like it . Yea that begging was like farting honestly
Hakuna Ma-Newgrounds! What a wonderful site!
Hakuna Ma-Newgrounds! Oh, so full of delight!
It's full of fun and games, for the rest of your days!
Let's all celebrate! And procrastinate!
Hakuna Ma-Newgrounds!
Begging like farting? Huh?
Or do you mean that the beginning of the song had a semi-flatulent timbre? (Yeah, that's probably what you meant.)
I hear a lot of good music but i wish you would piece it together better .
Try to go fo build up>brakedown>ending
The progression was a bit confusing for me .
thank you for your input! i'm kinda doing my own thing now when it comes to progression and what-not. This is the instrumental for a song that will be sung to, therefore I had to make the instrumental correspond with the vocals. My music generally doesn't feature a lot of breakdowns, but I could experiment with that and see where it take me.
Not a fun of this genre but if i was playing Painkiller or SeriousSam this would be great XD
Also i like your voice but i can't hear lyrics very well . I am russian though so it might be why
Hey thanks!
Maybe you don't understand the lyrics, because of my accent :D... I wouldn't understand them either. xD
whos emma watson? Please utilize those author commencts ;)
I am a bit of a sucker for choir ahh.. Melody is pretty sweat . Yours? or Remix?
Just one thing though .. Too short .
Emma Watson is a british actress. This is an original track.
~X
this is more liek chip-step music because of the low resolution pads and analog
Still i like it . It could work as background music for a game .
Sorry it's taken so long for me to respond. I'm usually only around every weekend O_O Anyway, I'm glad you like this song! :) By the way, I haven't heard that term "chip-step" is that like a less epic form of dubstep? lol ^_^
Until 1:07 i wanted to give you 5 starts because that build up was pretty epic . However
.. The effects pass 1:07 are too vibrant and bass is too high on good speakers . The entire thing just fell apart for me and track lost the identity .
Try to keep the music consistent . Do what you did first 60 seconds and brakedown melody into something softer .Stay away from vibrant vst in genreal . If this was in animation you obviously wouden't want so much noise.
The vision of this song isn't supposed to be soft. In the beginning it is supposed to draw you in.
When it hits that so called VST? That is actually a sample with a simple distortion filter effect added to it to make it sound UGLY. I stopped using VST's because they just don't sound believable. Unless it is just a Piano VST.
The bass? I have had this problem trying to fix the lower semitones of the bass due to the fact that I am wearing a set of V-Moda Crossfade M80's. For speakers? I have a 10 year old set of Logitech surround sound speakers with a separate subwoofer. I can't hear if it clips on any other set of speakers. I have my subwoofer set to half level, with no equalizers or presets set in my speaker settings through windows. (As in no additions to the bass, treble, and mid wave settings.)
As for the bassline itself. It to is a sample. Because my headphone's are able to handle much more bass than any old regular speaker I am able to drown out other sounds with it. And that is the vision of the bassline I wanted. I wanted it to sound ugly. It adds that extra sense of unwanted feeling behind the music. All because you aren't supposed to be choosing this path.
The title is Giul's Dream 2 "WRONG PATH." The original song Giul's Dream is much more Ambient and has a neutral tone to it throughout the entire song. Usually when you think of destruction you want things to sound soft. But this vision is trying to add that sense of "Unwanted emotional feeling" to it instead of being all soft, snuggly, and sad. It is supposed to make you feel angry at what you see. What I am trying to accomplish is making the player of the game actually want to have nothing to do with those choices and seek out the better outcome. Because after all... this is not the destruction of someone else's doing. It is that of your OWN doing.
As in you do not hear the question.... you only see your answers, and what they will lead to.
This game I have been working on for the past ten years... writing the story.... producing the music.... I am finding a new way to break that "4th wall."
And part of it is through dreams.
The bass drum? That is the transition between different answers that the player will decide. They will all not make sense. The player will see faces that they never seen before. While playing the game and meeting new people they may come across these figures or they may never even see them until it is too late.
Joined on 12/11/13
Open Your Eyes (Night Cruise M 
Catalyst 
TWRK 
WTF 
Emotionless 
Timewave Zero cover 
Emma Watson 
Pseudoluminated